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Post by Vadarth on Sept 8, 2009 19:45:10 GMT -5
Hm...What was I thinking? I was remembering what I wrote completely wrong...Huh. Well, you're right.
*Is shaken* AAAAH!!!
BTW, Kylie is your character, so did I personify her correctly? You didn't describe her personality well, so all I had to work with was basically "she has a short temper; gets angry easily".
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Post by Crazienous on Sept 9, 2009 1:16:55 GMT -5
hmm... seems I need to start from the beginning... mwhahahahahaaa... ugh, I'm gonna have a long day xD
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Post by Vadarth on Sept 9, 2009 15:26:04 GMT -5
lol
Please let me know if I portrayed Hazard correctly in the most recent chapter.
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on Sept 9, 2009 18:39:57 GMT -5
Yea, you did her perfectly. Her personailty is like fire, so she's very short-tempered.
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Post by Crazienous on Sept 9, 2009 22:07:06 GMT -5
well, I could say you portrayed his personality a bit less psychopathic serial killer, but I'm ok with that if he's not a total-... well, lets just say... not a friggen scaredy cat. but that is just me saying what's spikeing my eyeballs to shreads, and some other tiny things, but I'd still like to say, you did great! xD btw... you got another addicted one on ya
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on Sept 10, 2009 16:58:36 GMT -5
lol Dang, Asuki. Took you this long? I think this'll be a great start to getting the board back in activity. I'm actually going to be creating my own website soon*coughhopefullycough* for a comic/manga I'm writing, but I don't have a name for it, and I need a name for it.
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Post by Vadarth on Sept 10, 2009 22:16:11 GMT -5
Thanks both of you! Excellent!
If you want Tania, you could show me a few of the chapters (or one) of that comic/manga and I could help you think of a name (and maybe give you a few ideas too)?
And about Hazard...I could fix that...hehehe...
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on Sept 11, 2009 16:20:39 GMT -5
ONly have one chapter at the moment, and none of them are scanned up.
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Post by Vadarth on Sept 11, 2009 16:46:39 GMT -5
Ah...Have a basic plot [outline] yet?
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on Sept 12, 2009 8:42:02 GMT -5
Yea. The basic plot is the easy part.
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Post by Crazienous on Sept 12, 2009 9:57:45 GMT -5
oddly, I never have a plot ready, I just go with whatever pops into my mind O.o
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Post by Vadarth on Sept 12, 2009 12:02:53 GMT -5
I actually think that's a pretty good way to write, for it makes the writing more surprising, for writer and reader, and other reasons I forgot.
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Post by Crazienous on Sept 12, 2009 12:31:01 GMT -5
the bad thing about writing without a basic story line... is after a while... you get stuck xD
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Post by Vadarth on Sept 12, 2009 16:14:27 GMT -5
lol, indeed.
Both of you: check what I wrote in the little chat box please. Good bye for a while!
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Post by Vadarth on Feb 1, 2010 11:03:41 GMT -5
Chapter 15
1 Mobius – Great Jungle
“Huh. Yeah. OK. Wow,” Amy said in response to every one of Tails’ statements about recent events. “And, unfortunately (“Coughfortunatelycough,” Knuckles muttered), Big died in this battle…” Amy cocked her head and asked, “Who’s Big?” Tails looked crestfallen (“Forgot Big? I envy you,” Knuckles muttered). “How much have you forgotten?” he asked rhetorically, exasperated. Rouge looked from Tails to Amy to Knuckles to Silver1 to Silver2 and said, “Well, what now?” They looked at her and Silver1 said, “I suppose it is time to tell you all what happened in our doomed future.” Silver2 got up and said, “In the future, it seems another series of events has caused another disaster. We are not sure about everything, but we will tell you all we know.” Silver2 then said, “Dark creatures are everywhere. They are ruled by a bird who has tremendous power. We don’t know who he is or where he came from; he just appeared one day, and claimed everything for himself.” “We also know that he had some sort of crystal with him, a very powerful crystal. But, unfortunately, that is all,” Silver1 finished. There was silence. “That’s all?” Amy asked, “ ’cause that’s not much. At all.” Silver2 shrugged and Silver1 replied, “Well, that’s all we have.” Silence once more. “So,” Knuckles said, “what do we do now?”
2 Mobius – Grand Desert
The small flying ship crossed the line marking the end of the plains behind them and the Grand Desert ahead of them. Sonic was sitting next to a snoring Cream, who still had chocolate smears from the dozens of chocolate bars she had just eaten. Captain Grummel was standing a few feet away, driving the ship with the control panel at his robotic hands. A new yellow eye light brightened into existence on the back of his head and stared at Cream. Grummel emitted a noise quite close to a disgusted grunt, and pressed another few buttons on the keyboard in front of him as the new eye dimmed and disappeared. “We should be there in approximately three hours,” the robot grunted. Sonic nodded absentmindedly, his mind at a far off place.
2 Mobius – The Underground – Freedom City – Dr. Eggman’s Lab
Dr. Eggman watched the process with a frown. “This had better work,” he muttered to himself. Robots and his nephew, Snively, bustled around in the lab in front of him, working on something lying on a table. Snively suddenly stopped at a lever. He looked to Eggman, and was answered with a slight nod. Snively took a deep breath and pulled down on the lever. Red electricity erupted from the figure on the table. The machines surrounding the figure started frantically beeping and crackling with red electricity. Eggman rose and shouted, “Shut it down–”
2 Mobius – Grand Desert
“Wake up.” Sonic’s eyes snapped open. “Whaaa?” he yawned as he stretched his arms and legs. A hand grabbed him and threw him off the seats he was lying on. “Ow! Why’d you have to do that?” Sonic shouted. Captain Grummel looked down at him and pointed to the cockpit. Cream was sitting in the co-pilot’s seat, face against the window. Sonic got to his feet and walked over to Cream. “What the?” he exclaimed when looking out the window. To the right of their desert “hovership” was a huge red pit surrounded by sand and desert. The pit was blood red, and about the size of six football stadiums. Sand was pouring in by the tons. And hovering directly above it was ten hoverships. All bearing the Rose insignia. Captain Grummel plopped down into the pilot’s chair and turned on the intercom. “All units, prepare to strike and board the enemy’s crafts. Remember, our mission is to take some alive if we can. If not, you know what to do. Commence attack in 10…9…8…7…”
Vanilla whimpered as she looked down at the Great Red Pit. “Please, no…” she cried as two robots, overseen by three dog guards, picked her up and walked to the door of the hovership they were in. Just as they opened the door, an alarming beeping noise sounded from all over the hovership. “We’re under attack!” cried a voice from the cockpit. One of the dog guards rushed to shut the door, but was thrown to the floor by the weight of two dead robots. The hovership was rocked all over when another hovership connected itself to it, through the use of cables with special harpoons on the end. This new hovership opened its door and extended a bridge from it to the other one. Robots rushed on board. They destroyed the robots on board, but knocked out all of the guards there, taking them prisoner. They also secured Vanilla and rushed back to their hovership.
Sonic stood on top of the hovership and jumped. He rose into the air and spiraled down into another hovership. He crashed through the roof of it and quickly made short work of the surrounding robots. He spotted two dog guards and quickly kicked them, sending them flying into a wall, unconscious. Sonic looked around, but saw no sign of Vanilla. He quickly jumped up through the hole he made and looked around. He spotted Eggman’s robots leaving a hovership with Vanilla to another one. “Yes! We did it!” Sonic exclaimed. BOOM!!!! Sonic stumbled and fell on his face. He quickly flipped himself over and got up to see the remnants of a Rose Hovership. It had been completely destroyed from the inside out. And, almost flying away from the smoke, was Cream. Using her incredible jumping skills, she reached another hovership. She put her hand down upon its roof. It began to glow, brighter and brighter until it suddenly ceased. She then jumped off just as the entire hovership crumpled and imploded – and then exploded. “Wow…” Sonic murmured with his mouth hanging slightly open. Cream did this to the remaining hoverships, even causing the accidental deaths of a few of their allies in the process. Sonic quickly jumped back to the hovership he started on at the same time Cream did. The entered and saw a row of prisoners, all unconscious, and, in the very middle, was Vanilla. Vanilla and Cream locked eyes and sat/stood there, sataring. Both then burst into tears and ran for each other, holding each other tight. Sonic himself became a bit teary-eyed. Vanilla looked into Creams’ eyes and ruffled her ears. “I’m so sorry Cream, I’m so sorry. I love you!” Cream sniffled and said, “Mom…I HATE YOU, YOU GODDAMN *****!!!!” Swinging around, Cream held her mother by the throat with one hand. She held her directly over the Great Red Pit and said, “YOU BETRAYED ME, AND NOW YOU SHALL PAY!!!!” Cream snarled and glared at Vanilla with an evil smile, then dropped her. “NO!” Sonic shouted, and ran for the door. Cream, without turning, held up a fist at the exact spot Sonic was, sending him down to the ground, clutching his nose. “CREAM!!” he shouted in anger, confusion, and pain. He could hear the mother’s screams as she fell down, down, and down. Slowly, he crawled to the edge of the open door and looked down. He was able to still see Vanilla, but she was already more than half-way down into the pit. And then rumbled started. The ground was shaking, something being awoken. And then the red pit grew teeth and lunged upwards. “BANK LEFT NOW!!!” Captain Grummel shouted. All of the ships quickly turned on engines and tried to fly away. Of the five, two fell victim to the Great Red Pit. It arced up into the sky, “flying” past Sonic’s hovership. A huge completely black eye passed by the door. Sonic gulped. The huge monstrous thing had arced up, around, and back down into the sand, plowing straight through with an amazing amount of force. This continued for at least five minutes until a “tail” was seen arcing up through the sand and back into it. The rumbling noise slowly began to cease. “What…was…that?” Sonic squeaked. “That, was the Great Red Pit. It’s a giant sandworm.”
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