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Post by taisky on May 27, 2008 8:21:34 GMT -5
*Ok, I'm a little tired, so I'm gonna make this short for now. Sorry.*
Sparks struck the ground from the exposed wires, fizzling out as they touched the pavement. A small crowd had gathered to watch the specticle, most of whom were gasping in terror. Among them was a gray weasle-type person, wearing a purple jacket with two breast pockets. A light-brown hat covered his head, sheilding his face from passerby.
"Impressive," he muttered to himself as he turned on his heels and started to depart. "Undoubtly the fools will hold Eggman responsible. But seeing those kids in action...I'll have to upgrade my robots if I want to take them down...hehehe."
Stripes flew at the wires attatched to the wheels, but was forced to stop before he even came close. The electricity crackling there was tremendous. If it wasn't stopped soon, the people still lingering would be seriously hurt...
"Having difficulties?"
Stripes looked up in time to see Rouge throw some kind of silver javelin at the robotic monster. It struck the chest plate and sunk in. The metallic coating buckled, and a small explosion occuered where the object had hit. A shock of force went through the robot's body, then it collapsed and fell apart, crumpling to the ground.
Tania, Stripes, Manic, and Rouge all fled the scene, fearing that there was either more of the things around looking for them, or that they would be blamed for the damage caused. If more were after them, they could lead them away from the town. If they were blamed, well, theives weren't exactally at the top of a lawyer's 'Must Help List'.
*-yawns- Okay I'll stop for now. Any suggestions before I continue? I'd really appreciate it! ^^*
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on May 27, 2008 14:20:12 GMT -5
None at the moment. Cool story, though.
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Post by taisky on May 29, 2008 9:35:45 GMT -5
*Apparently I'm just too lazy to continue at the moment. Waking up at 4 in the morning does that to you. I'll try and think up ideas for now, but if anybody has a preference, I would be totally grateful. I want this story to be to everybody's liking. -yawns-*
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Post by kiara on May 29, 2008 15:24:45 GMT -5
-blinks- Omg, 66 posts. Get 600 more an' you'll have mah favorite number |D
I liek what you've come up with so far. I can't come up with anything, my mind's on my own fanfic... @w@
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Post by taisky on Jun 16, 2008 15:52:17 GMT -5
*I'm finally getting ungrounded, so I'll post soon. ^^*
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Post by Crazienous on Jun 21, 2008 14:25:23 GMT -5
... I wish there was a smiley for jaw dropping... D:
this' amazing! I'mma wondering what'll happen next aswell as other stuff =o *is so hyped & wishing for more to come soon* xD
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Post by taisky on Jul 3, 2008 23:01:05 GMT -5
*Okay, writer's block is finally gone! Okay guys, I appreciate your feedback to no extent! If not for what you guys have to say, I might not even be continuing. ^^;*
After what seemed like hours of running, everybody stopped to catch their breath. By now they were far away from Mobius Town by several miles. They were at the edge of Turnbuckle Forest, a place said to be haunted by evil, departed souls.
"Well, what should we do now?" Tania asked as she stood up, clutching a stitch in her side." We can't go back their. Our home was destroyed."
"Yours was, mine wasn't," Rouge said mockingly.
"Its because of you that we can't go back!" Tania screeched. "You self-centered, egotistical, just plain rude bat thing, you!"
"For your information," Rouge retorted, placing her hands on her hips, "That thing didn't belong to the military! It didn't have their logo anywhere on it! It didn't have Eggmans's logo on it either, come to think of it."
"The Thief Underground..." Stripes whispered. Everybody present had to strain their ears to hear what their friend had murmured.
"Thief...Underground?" Rouge repeated. "Who are they?"
"They're a group of notorious thieves," Manic explained. "They've been plaguing Mobius Town for, like, five years now. The members were thrown from their jobs and homes because of low money availability. They banded together and formed an underground organization. They're the ones responsible for at least 78 percent of the town's misfortunes. I'm guessing they've pooled a good chunk of change to build that 'bot. But ya gotta wonder... what's their motive?" As he said this, Manic was tapping a beat on the stump of a nearby tree.
"Its simple," Stripes said, getting to his feet. "They want revenge against those who forclosed their homes."
"How do you even know all of this?" Tania asked, concern at the tip of her voice. "This information sounds dangerous to have been aquired.
"We're thieves," Manic and Stripes said together proudly. "Its our job!"
~End of Chapter Two
*Okay, that's it for now. I'm gonna take a day off tomorrow I guess. 4th of July and all. Feedback, please! ^^*
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Post by Crazienous on Jul 4, 2008 4:13:31 GMT -5
Feedback, you say? okay, here it is; KEEP IT UP! It's amazing to no end! xD
by the way, I'm gettin' some vibes about that thar forest... and I'mma dunno if it's-a good or bad vibes. =o
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on Jul 4, 2008 12:11:01 GMT -5
I've got to agree with that first part that Askui had, and I liked they way you showed Tania's bad part of her personality. Short-tempered, but concerend for her friends. (If she coudl call Rouge a friend. XD)
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Post by kiara on Jul 4, 2008 12:29:20 GMT -5
That's a-cuz they're both good and bad vibes~ My feedback? Manic needs to slang more. xD; I shall reword big Manic speech into more Manic-y dialogue Of course, I'm not the best with slang and the like, so... Yeah xD I dunno if I got his personality completely right. "They're a group of notorious thieves," Manic explained. "They've been plaguing Mobius Town for, like, five years now. The members were thrown from their jobs and homes because of low money availability. They banded together and formed an underground organization. They're the ones responsible for at least 78 percent of the town's misfortunes. I'm guessing they've pooled a good chunk of change to build that 'bot. But ya gotta wonder... What's their motive?" Rappa-tappa-tap-tap. He oughta whip out his drumsticks and start tapping a beat on a tree or something. xD
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on Jul 4, 2008 12:35:21 GMT -5
Doing that seems like Manic. XD Nice, Kiara.
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Post by taisky on Jul 5, 2008 16:29:24 GMT -5
*Okay, post modified! ^^*
~Chapter Three: The Thieve's Ring
After a moment of silence, Rouge decided to lighten the mood. Or try to, at least.
"Isn't their a rumor about these woods?" she asked, not even tring to cover the boredom in her voice. Tania was about to retort with some sarcasm when Stripes gave an answer.
"Its been rumored," he said, retelling a sinister tale, "That there was once a King of Thieves that had made a hideout in these woods. He was feared by the common people, but respected by theives far and wide. He wasn't known just for his talents or looks, though, but more so for the ring he always kept on his right hand. A golden band encrested with jewels the colors of the rainbow."
"Before he died," Stripes continued, "The King of Thieves had offered a challenge. He placed the ring on a podium in the center of his hideout. Any thief who managed to get ahold of it would be dubbed the next King of Thieves. The ring is priceless, and the stroy is as old as stealing itself. Many have tried to find the ring, but every last one has failed, ranting about 'the King's ghost.' Manic and I have been planning on coming here for some time, but we just never got around to it."
"Don't ask," Manic said with a sly grin that practically screamed 'We were off making mischief.' "Its a long story and I'm tired of telling it.
"I hate it when you smile like that," Rouge said and Tania laughed at the look in her eyes and the fear in her voice.
*Sorry, but I gotta leave you all with a cliffhanger. I just thought up this idea at random, and I really like it so I'm gonna go plot some more. ^^*
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Post by Tania "Windwatcher" Sky on Jul 5, 2008 16:33:53 GMT -5
XD Your planning something big, aren't you?
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Post by Crazienous on Jul 5, 2008 16:35:11 GMT -5
Give me an O, give me a M, give me a G! and what do you get?! O-M-G! cliffhangers are to die for... *nods to self*
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Post by taisky on Jul 5, 2008 16:41:15 GMT -5
Is it that obvious to tell? XD XD Yes they are. Just don't jump off of a cliff to get the feel of it. You might not be able to tell us afterwards. I was thinking that the ring could grant phenomanol theiving powers, but I'm not sure yet, that would be too easy. I am gonna make the hideout pretty big, though. ^^
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